Before & after

I guess all the work going on around me and my anticipation of what my site will look like when they're finished has led me to today's theme. I would like to explore the age old practice of, before and after. To begin with, I’ve been trying to rewrite my first novel to make it less autobiographical, or in other words, a more enjoyable read. It’s a work in progress but below is an excerpt of the before and after, so you can track the progress.